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Please Do Not Disturb
Contributed by
jyssvw22
on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 07:10:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Preach to the choir
Easy streets desired
Token economy
Where the dollar
Wont stretch the mile
Gold rush out east
Cramming into the city
A house for lease
A car for traffic
Inadequate, mobility
Impairs my speech
Repercussions creep
As your dreams sleep
The alarm clock reminds you
The sun has risen
Day has commenced
Night has died
Your images
Trapped in wire on a fence
Guarded from events
On the outside
Perpetrated by the menace
In between your cortex
And the jet steam vortex
Voices that connect
Pat you on the back
Asks you to move it along
Or you might be next
Not a success
Rather a positive influence
Under protest
Riots forfeit to a hindrance
A preponderance of the evidence
Overwhelming, sediment, of a sentiment
A pendant representative
Of virtues unspoken and unaccredited
Assumed to be dead
Cloudy vision and muddy water
Stark decisions in rational judgment
Dark religions offer a sacrament
Bypass the main exotic attraction
Forgo the platonic resemblance of satisfaction
Ergo the cosmic creator reins hell for the interruption
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jyssvw22
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Re: Please Do Not Disturb
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 08:49:42 PM AEST
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Wow jyss...you really go all out in this one!! I love the sense of urgency and the irony in your words. Great job; I really like this one, and I love the ending...
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Re: Please Do Not Disturb
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 12:02:45 AM AEST
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| excellent read. im very impressed with this poem, keep writing. |
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Re: Please Do Not Disturb
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 09:39:57 PM AEST
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This is great hate..
I love the short, haulting rhyming scheme..
3rd stanza's best..
and what a most powerful ending..
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