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Nerves
Contributed by
xanabananax
on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 01:15:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Im so confused
I lost my mind
I dont think I have enought time
I tell myself
Things just aint right
And im wishing that everything would be alright
I close my eyes
I take deep breath
One more step and i'll be there
I hear your voice
I move back
Open my eyes
I see your
Your looking at me
I try to smile
You nod your head
You smile back
Thoughts go through my head
Im trying to speak
No words come out
Just a soft sound
Im lost in thoughts
He says he has to go
I nod my head and turn around
I walk back
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2005-07-12 01:15:05]
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Re: Nerves
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by happy_girl on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 01:22:28 AM AEST
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I loved this poem.
very well written.
take care,
marjan |
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Re: Nerves
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by RoxyGirl on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 01:31:55 AM AEST
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This poem was very good keep writing
ALWAYS LOVE YOUR FRIEND
ROXYGIRL
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Re: Nerves
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by SinginSilence on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 01:37:32 AM AEST
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| I like how the first line starts with how you're confused (as most things with love can be) and the rest of the poem contains no punctuation. That along with the short lines is really reflective of what I think you were feeling. Good job. |
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