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Leave Me Dreaming
Contributed by
xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 09:32:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Far off from here,
But deep within me,
Lies a safe place,
A sanctuary.
Where nobody hurts,
And nobody cries.
Nobody kills,
And nobody dies.
I don't have to worry,
And I don't have to fear.
For, things of that nature
Do not exist here.
This place is so perfect,
But blocked by what's real.
A place I despise,
Where only hurt's what I feel.
So turn out the light,
And hug me before leaving.
I think that I'll be ok now.
So, just leave me dreaming.
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xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
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2005-07-11 21:32:59] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Leave Me Dreaming
(User Rating: 1 ) by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 09:55:26 AM AEST (User
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This was amazing Karis!!! I really really like this! You have a twist at the ending and the structure was great! You kept a rhyming pattern which made everything even better, this is a piece to be proud of, well done! The whole time it had a sad and mellow tone but reading that last line I just wanted to get up and cheer, this was a great piece creative and original like all your writes, well done!
Your cuz,
.amanda. |
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