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Volcanic Turmiol
Contributed by
LabWolf
on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 02:47:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Cry with me for the injustice of life.
Help me to remove this knife -
that pierces my chest, that is driven so deep,
that it hurts even more each time I weep.
Lie with me and run with me -
through the scenes of this tragedy.
Tell me again what I have told you -
that we will see him when our lives are through.
Hold your head against my heart...
Forever, until the healing starts.
Life will go on as I curse each day -
and god for taking our son away.
Faith in us, faith in love,
but enraged at whatever lives above.
Faith in you, and in me,
but condemned by this misery.
I look to the heavens. I scream out in vain.
There are now answers or end to this pain.
I look beside me and would gladly die
to ensure that my love need never again cry.
Confusion seeks relief in words,
yet this force can never be heard.
Volcanic turmoil reaching the sky.
Why couldn't I have been the one to die...
I did pray to be the one to die.
© Barry Veinotte
Copyright ©
LabWolf
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2005-07-11 14:47:22]
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Re: Volcanic Turmiol
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 10:46:05 PM AEST
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| yes, yes. a professional write, they are so uncommon these days on the site. i must say that made me like this just because you can simply use the english language, because many here cannot. i loved the rhymes and ending especially in this. |
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Re: Volcanic Turmiol
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd April 2006 @ 09:06:34 AM AEST
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| Very strong emotional movement through the "volcanic turmoil" of the author's loss. I really enjoyed taking the journey. Good Work! Note, the word "now" in the fifth verse should be, I believe, "no". and the word turmoil is misspelled in the title. Such things diminish the poignancy of the poem. |
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