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we are the stars
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 07:18:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
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we are the water
dangerous when stirred in mass
drowning each other
drowning within ourselves
yet when we fall so far below
sinking to the bottom
we always seem to find a treasure
that those on top have missed
we are the light
oblivious to how bright we shine
only able to discern
the darkenss all around us
criticizing others
for the dullness of their glow
so quick to dismiss the possibility
that they think the same of us
we are deaf
not because we cannot hear
but because we do not listen
we are blind
not because we cannot see
but because we refuse to
we are the damned
wasting our lives chasing invisible men
whose loophole promises echo on
from a time we never knew
believing every empty scripture
like an optimistic hooker
so hopelessly impaled
on ever word she wished he'd said
we are Nothing
and no self-assuring religion
will ever change that truth
every hollow gesture of permanance
every feeble attempt at immortality
produces the same echoed footsteps
of a death come to take
what we can only borrow
we are the stars
some shining brighter than others
all held in the depthless Void
some will shine on for what seems like forever
and some will burn out far too fast
and some will rain down like fire on the earth
and leave no taint of our presence
only ash
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Cancer
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Re: we are the stars
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by pixie on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 07:46:18 PM AEST
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brilliant writing, lovely and dark, amazing
pix xx |
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Re: we are the stars
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by shelby on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:02:25 PM AEST
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incredible so full of power a masterpiece in my book!
Michelle |
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Re: we are the stars
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 05:10:19 PM AEST
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Incredible write... so much truth in it..
Jenni |
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Re: we are the stars
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 07:22:02 PM AEST
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Really good poem man it was good to read
something by you again although i felt as if
the joy was being sucked out of me as I raed
this lol. I liked this part the best and it is so
true as well.
"we are deaf
not because we cannot hear
but because we do not listen
we are blind
not because we cannot see
but because we refuse to"
An all around great write man.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: we are the stars
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 06:25:14 PM AEST
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"like an optimistic hooker
so hopelessly impaled
on ever word she wished he'd said"
Good one. |
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Re: we are the stars
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by drtylilsecret on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 02:34:19 PM AEST
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oh wow, absolutely fantastic, i'd quote my favorite lines but then i'd have to copy the whole poem. dark, hopeless, my favorite kind. brilliant, i loved it. gonna have to read more of your stuff...
--talli
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Re: we are the stars
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 12:13:07 PM AEST
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wow and wow! a fabulous truthful beautiful poem!
hugs n' love nessa
roses |
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Re: we are the stars
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 2nd January 2008 @ 12:21:37 PM AEST
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Hey Cancer, haven't talked to you in awhile
and I haven't been on YPDC in I don't know
how long. I assume you are still alive and
wherever you are I hope you are in a better
place than you used to be. Assuming you are
reading this I just though I'd take a swing
down memory lane and read one of your
scrawls (as you were fond of calling them).
Anyway, enough of the sentimental bs... The
poem itself was solid and I am assuming
you are talking about humanity. You are very
wise Roy and I see 98% of humanity almost
the same way you do. The last 4 lines of the
2nd stanza and the entire 3rd stanza I TOTALLY agree with. Well Roy before this
turns into a novel I found your mention of "the
depthless Void" interesting as I to have
mentioned the "Void" in some of my poems
as well. 4.9/5 If you get this, e-mail me Roy
it'd be swell to hear from you!
bobothepimpclown@hotmail.com |
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Re: we are the stars
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by Jason_Robert_Britt on
Wednesday, 4th February 2009 @ 04:35:35 AM AEST
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| Great poem!!!! I loved this one Cancer!!!! where have u been? Lost like me? |
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Re: we are the stars
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 9th December 2016 @ 08:40:25 AM AEST
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I remember seeing your name on here a long time ago...2005 is when I joined this lovely site. I must say; it/'/s a damn shame to see you haven/'/t posted in 11 years. This poem is well-written and I enjoy the wordplay. Great message. Are you still writing?
I hope so.
~Scorp |
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