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Torn Apart
Contributed by
xxSuicidalChickxx
on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 05:14:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I'm tearing out my heart
And giving it to you
Cause now I don't want it
You've broken it in two
You can do what you want with it
Cause I don't really care
Just don't give it back
Cause I wouldn't be able to bare
The sight of seeing you again
Or hearing the sound of your voice
You had a chance and you blew it
But I guess it was your choice
Maybe your right
About everything you said
But I know I'm right about one thing
It will be better when I'm dead
Copyright ©
xxSuicidalChickxx
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2005-07-10 17:14:57]
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Kitty06 on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 05:37:49 PM AEST
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| I think if you combine this poem with your other poem 'Letting Go' I think it would capture the full effect of the theme of lost love. Your poem 'Eternal Love' is a wonderful poem and it fully captures the emotion it portrays. Find a way to link 'Lettin Go' and 'Torn Apart' and I think you will really have something. Keep posting! |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:10:54 PM AEST
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good write, i think this has a great theme to it, and could use some work with the way its all put to words, but over all, a great piece
~Clark |
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