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The Request
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 11:01:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Take me now
a captive
to your beauty
Bind my hands
and lead me
to my doom
Blinded by
the brilliance
ever shining
That fills me
when you walk
into the room
Cast away
the lines
that keep me harbored
Let this vessel
drift
out of control
Far into
desires
raging waters
To drown
within the rivers
of your soul
L. Carling C2005
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2005-07-09 23:01:03]
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Re: The Request
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 11:04:59 PM AEST
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Well, again my friend, you have taken mere words and woven them into a tale of beauty that touches a heart deeply. Splendid work.
Rita |
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Re: The Request
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by waos on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 11:07:48 PM AEST
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That's very good and sweet. Interesting form. Good work.
~Kara |
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Re: The Request
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 11:12:42 PM AEST
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WooHoo!! Larry's been struck once again!!
"Let this vessel
drift
out of control
Far into
desires
raging waters
To drown
within the rivers
of your soul"
Good going pal...
Jenni |
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Re: The Request
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:05:21 AM AEST
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"There's a great power in words if you don't hitch too many of them together."
Beautifully crafted, made me feel quite lovey-dovey myself. The format of the poem gives it good effect too. *hands Larry a rose* |
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Re: The Request
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by CarolinaBlue on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:59:32 AM AEST
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beautiful write! sounds as if someone's been bitten by the love bug pretty hard ;-) just remember to come up for air, tee hee. great job!
~Blue~ |
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Re: The Request
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by emystar on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 01:45:35 AM AEST
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Simply beautifull.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: The Request
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 02:57:06 AM AEST
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Oh jeesh Larry, you are truly once poetic soul. I love this tender write of yours.
The love just pours out from every syllable. Good work as always.
Hugs,
Jane xxx
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Re: The Request
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by Kie on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:56:30 AM AEST
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Your fingers are a waterfall of romance.
I dunno where it comes from to write the way you do but if I could bottle it up and sell it-- I'd be rich beyond belief.
It's incredible to feel inspired just by reading whatever it is you write.
You'll never lose it L.
But if you do, maybe it will circulate!
LOL~~
Kie :) |
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Re: The Request
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:23:01 PM AEST
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A beautiful write my friend in your usual gracious style and form, have one on me
very nice . . .
Ben |
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Re: The Request
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by Justintears on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:25:40 PM AEST
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"bind my hands and lead me to my doom"
...can't get the vision out of my mind. Makes love worth all the pain. Great enjoyment in every word. Well done.. |
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Re: The Request
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 07:10:58 PM AEST
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A very good write..
I love the analogy of love as to "vessels" and "water"
B |
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Re: The Request
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by pixie on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:19:13 PM AEST
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such beauty, no-one can write quite like you Larry, amazing, missed you and your writes,lovely....
pix xx |
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Re: The Request
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 01:12:00 AM AEST
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such beauty and love in this write.
I really really like this piece .
awsome job once again. |
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Re: The Request
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 02:06:43 AM AEST
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I loved the ending my friend... I loved it all, but
the ending is just so perfect it just makes an
all around perfect poem even more perfect if
that is possible. Thanks for sharing this man
I trust that you are doing well.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: The Request
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 04:22:47 AM AEST
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Dynamic as always my dear friend. I love ur writing. You are a very talented and gifted writer. May ur pen always flow fluently with such poetic masterpieces dearest Larry. Hats off to u.
*warm hugs*
~sue~ |
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