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Passing forever
Contributed by
socialmisfit
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Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 04:46:59 AM in AEST
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how long have tears tread down my face
how many nights have taken me deeper in hate
were did i look to find that one place
what did i do to bring my mind to this state?
how many times have i asked
why is it that i wake
how many times did i wonder
is it an angel or a devil i will make
and how long have i been
standing before this looking glass
yelling at my own face
and crying over my broken past
how deep are my fears
how far down do they really go
when will i let my dreams fly?
if i never let them show
and how long has it been
since i became aware
that all i did was live to breathe
and at happiness longingly stare?
how many times will it take on skipping forever
for me to find what's really important
i cant tell you
becouse i dont know
but passing forever has a price
and giving up never works
so take my advice
if given the chance to love.. take it, and don't think twice
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Re: Passing forever
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by emystar on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 04:56:09 AM AEST
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Very strong, importent masterpeice.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Passing forever
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by Shorty_88 on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 08:24:12 AM AEST
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Fantastic write and thankyou very much for your comment.
Warmest Regards, Tara |
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Re: Passing forever
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by Arden on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 10:30:40 AM AEST
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i had to read this slowy just so i could absored it and actually try to feel what the writer was expressing.
this was very powerful and the emotion just poured from this write.
i am very impressed with this. there's no great word usage or style but you dont need those in this because you have a masterpiece.
5/5 best poem iv read in a long while.
-Arden |
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Re: Passing forever
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by manic_x_pressive on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 02:22:05 PM AEST
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| WOW!...Simply amazing. Awesome job. I can really relate to this one especially the third stanza...your not alone. |
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Re: Passing forever
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 02:52:27 PM AEST
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Oh my...you said you don't think you are qualified to comment on my writes?!?! Let me say you have a wonderful, natural flare for poetry, as is so clearly evident in this amazing write! You did an excellent job conveying your feelings in a very real manner that the reader can most certainly relate to...I loved the whole poem, but the 2nd, 3rd, and especially the 4th stanza really stood out for me...Very well done!!!
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Re: Passing forever
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by venkat on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 01:42:08 AM AEST
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Quite absorbing..Good flow...well wrapped.
I enjoy your writes :-) venkat |
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