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Sweet Surrender
Contributed by
onangelswings
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Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 12:46:27 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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As lips do whisper words so tender
And hearts comply in sweet surrender
As hands reach out shaken yet bold
This body yearns to be the one they hold
As hearts do beat in loves sweet tune
And eyes do glimmer to mock the moon
As promises are made to love forever
This heart vows as well to leave you never
As flames are ignited within a kiss
And lovers strain to meet such bliss
As heart and body lay intertwined
This soul trembles for pleasure we find
As distance finds us now apart
And wishes are made within the stars
I yearn for the moments we love together
Overwhelmed with the feeling of sweet surrender
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2005-07-09 00:46:27]
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Re: Sweet Surrender
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 04:45:12 PM AEST
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Such a beautiful write in deed as always . . .
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Re: Sweet Surrender
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by Spike on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 08:30:26 PM AEST
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Terrific rhythm to the piece, clever hooks and a solid yet gentle working of familiar but always fresh subject matter. The pairing of 'sweet surrender' in the first and last stanzas is a nice touch, making this almost lyrical in its flow.
Impressive,
Spike
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Re: Sweet Surrender
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 05:30:03 PM AEST
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| Your poems always touch my heart, and now, they make me wonder.......Mike |
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