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Last Kiss
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 08:08:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Last Kiss
I blow a kiss
To a memory
That I'll miss
For eternity.
Silver linings
Have faded
By dreams lying
And being jaded.
Dreams don't come true
Like I've wanted them to.
Hopelessness
Isn't missed
With dreamless
Bliss.
Memories are forgotten
When waking sadly
To the dreams begotten...
Yet, still not to be.
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 08:14:48 PM AEST (User
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hrm, i like it Jen, seems older style, The ending was as always the best part of your write, awesome as always Jen
~big bro |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 09:10:22 PM AEST (User
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Very good writing
I like this poem
The best dreams are the one's
we never had
spontaneuse moments top all
others
I hope this makes sense to you |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 09:51:08 PM AEST (User
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Last stanza's best..
but I think maybe,
you owe it to yourself..
in this write,
to bring a tad more..
(not sure of what..)
especialy in the second..
but it did have that "old world" feel that I love..
All in all, a great write Jen..
B
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by Willofree on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 09:56:32 PM AEST (User
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A worthy poem with a rather unique style. A romantic theme, which seems to focus on saying good bye. You have a talent to say a lot with fewer words.
Excellant write, Jennifer
Also, thanks very much for your comments on my poem, Hidden Horrors
Will
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 12:55:43 AM AEST (User
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 08:57:34 AM AEST (User
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Your poem just twisted me inside. I felt for you and I have no idea if it was reality writing or an impressive imagination. You write with the talent of a natural to poetry.
I'm in awe at the moment.
It was also flawless.
Kie |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 04:01:51 PM AEST (User
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A very nostalgic piece...I like your emotions in this write; more delicate than usual. The first stanza was a great opener, and I really liked the last two as well.
Scorp. |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 04:56:42 PM AEST (User
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U know jen i finnaly put my finger on what i like most about your poetry amongst other things, this poem brought it out, u write what i feel but won't say cause of riddicule, as always your poetry is magnificent . . .
Ben |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 09:08:54 PM AEST (User
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Jennifer this was a piece of work, every line just grabbed me, taking my air, leaving me with such a feeling of sadness. Hauntingly beautiful. Thanks for sharing. Peace my friend, Laura |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by jyssvw22 on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 09:10:45 PM AEST (User
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this was amazing
i loved the end
so sudden
drastic
nice job |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by xXcrossedXx on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:01:40 AM AEST (User
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This was an interesting poem but written beautifully. You have a way with words and they all flowed wonderfully in this piece. Great work, sorry this isn't much of a comment its about midnight and I haven't had much sleep lately... enough of my life story... great poem lol I'll be excited for more to come,
.amanda. |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by lillyjane on
Monday, 15th August 2005 @ 05:52:15 AM AEST (User
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So sad but beautiful, x |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 11:34:44 PM AEST (User
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I agree very sad but beautifully writen.
huggs,
emy
Dang I am behind for sure. |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by candysears on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 09:27:55 PM AEST (User
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I have read many of your post and they are just beautiful...Great writer...I Will get around to all....God Bless..
You are great indeed..
candy |
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Re: Last Kiss
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 01:14:13 PM AEST (User
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Hogwash!!!!!
Not the poem..lol
Sorry but I DO believe in dreams!
And should I have ever doubted that your great write would get a rise out of me??
Surely not!
I like reading your old stuff, but miss watching your life progress through current writes....hugs! |
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