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tonights the night
Contributed by
unluckicharmz
on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 04:50:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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tonights the night i died
dont scream and cry
youll be just fine
even though in not here
i took the knife deep
my wrists wouldnt stop pouring blood
my eyes wouldnt stop pouring tears
the rope around my neck was so tight
it reminded me of the nights i wanted to hold you
the note i left
bloody and tearstained
sits next to the knife
it reads:
' thanks for making me realize the world is nothing'
i couldnt handle all the pain at once
i wouldnt let the world see me like this
so i died tonight
the blood and tears finally stopped
and i couldnt feel the tightness of the rope
i hang in peace overlooking the world
that wasnt worth holding on anymore
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unluckicharmz
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2005-07-08 16:50:32]
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Re: tonights the night
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by Kitty06 on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 05:10:27 PM AEST
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| The last two lines of this poem tie it together well. The lines referring to the rope and the person the character wanted to hold was excellent, it gives the poem a strong feeling of lost hope. A great write. |
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Re: tonights the night
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 09:31:31 PM AEST
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aww... great write! but i wish you didn't feel like this. i liked the words you chose and how you pulled it all together! but, i wish you didn't hurt youself. i know the world is like hell, but we have to be strong and stick together and fight through it!!
wishing you lots of luck!
~sprints
p.s. i really liked it! keep it up! |
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Re: tonights the night
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by upomik on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 09:57:05 PM AEST
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| great write. i feel that way all the time. if you ever want to talk then my aol screenname is kimannisister. i'm out |
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Re: tonights the night
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by MisunderstoodBlonde182 on
Monday, 8th November 2010 @ 02:14:22 PM AEST
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| That was so sad... but amazing |
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