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Friend By Touch
Contributed by
XxcrossedxX
on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:41:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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My old friend is gone,
I know, just where it went wrong.
That is why I'll make no mistakes,
As this new guy takes his place.
His skin is not as smooth,
And his mind, not as sharp.
But the touch, it will do,
Oh, how his touch will do.
My old friend is gone,
I know where it went wrong.
That is why I'll keep my friend inside,
And all his secrets, I will hide.
His skin is not as shiny,
And his nose has no point,
But his touch, it will do.
Oh, how his touch will do.
My old friend is gone,
I know what I did wrong,
That is why I'll keep my mouth shut,
I won't tell a single soul that I cut.
For, when you took the knife away,
That wasn't my final day.
Because I have found a new friend,
The Scissor Blade.
And oh, how his touch will do.
Copyright ©
XxcrossedxX
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2005-07-08 10:41:05]
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Re: Friend By Touch
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by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:45:49 AM AEST
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Amazing twist athere Amanda, nothing less then greatness from you from all angles, dark and awesome, as always
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Re: Friend By Touch
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by jjones12 on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:48:53 AM AEST
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well i think that an awesome poem, i think your an awesome writter. it must have been very tradgic.(sorry i cant spell very good)any way ya....great write!
=jen=
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Re: Friend By Touch
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 02:14:32 PM AEST
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| brilliant amanda. i mean it. very impressive. |
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Re: Friend By Touch
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by Kitty06 on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 04:16:07 PM AEST
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| The repetition of 'Oh, how his touch will do' ties the poem together. The descriptions of the knife and the scissor blade are the best part about the poem. It's amazing how you used personification with these objects to fool the reader into thinking the poem is describing a new human friend instead. Excellent write. |
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Re: Friend By Touch
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by xXx_lil_pyro_xXx on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 11:34:47 AM AEST
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i'm glad you took the time to write this instead of acting upon it. It was a great peice, and every once in a while it'll be good for you to reflect on. but you'd better not cut gurl cause then i'll be allowed to! lol.
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