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Mountain Dust
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 07:40:40 PM in AEST
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Far up the lonely mountain side
my wandering footsteps led..
the moss lay thick beneath my feet,
the pines bent overhead.
The remnants of a cabin home
lay in the forest.. brave
and shallow, just along the path,
I saw a single grave:
The ivy twisted with the weed
upon the lonely mound..
the solemn stone that stood alone
had fallen to the ground.
I raised it with a reverent hand
and from the earth.. 'twould clear-
but time had stained all words but these:
-HERE LIES A MOTHER DEAR-
I saw the cricket and the snake
from tangled cover dart
and hide themselves amongst the leaves
above the woman's heart..
but undisturbed.. in sleep profound
in stillness there.. she lay.
No casket but the mountain soil
all about her lay.
She sleeps.. no need to question now
if she were wrong or right..
she knows in death.. His cause was just..
Her Lord and Savior's Sight..
She wields no life and love alike-
returns no noble trust...
This Mother Dear along the path,
that lies in mountain dust.
M.O.H.
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by wizard on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 07:52:44 PM AEST
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you truly become king midas whilst you wield your pen...for everything you write surely is gold..this is perhaps your best yet...although selecting a best of yours is undoubtly a most difficult task..here, though, i loved every word - as well as the complete message and scene.
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Doriens_Picture on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 07:58:23 PM AEST
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you know this poem was amazing but eiry coz a few lines reminde me of scenes i have been in
the moss lay thick beneath my feet,
the pines bent overhead.
The ivy twisted with the weed
upon the lonely mound..
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 09:24:28 PM AEST
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I Trully got lost in your work
XOJILLOX |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:05:18 PM AEST
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A true masterpiece Dear Billy.
It was like a beautiful movie playing inside my head......very real indeed.
A sad write. Is this just a poem or is your mother really sleeping in peace?
Awesome, just brilliant/
My love. |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:08:53 PM AEST
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Saying I get lost in your work be an understatement!! You are an awesome poet...
I am glad I found your work.... I feel honored!!
Thank you, Billy..
Jenni |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 11:03:37 PM AEST
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Oh my holy God, this is beautiful, Billy. The imagery is perfection. We need to be able to have a place to save our favorites for this would surely go to mine.
Rita |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 06:50:37 AM AEST
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I like this alot
your expression is perfect |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:23:41 AM AEST
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Touching poem beautiful vision and colors
a true heartfelt feeling i got from this splend
write . . .
Ben |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:42:09 AM AEST
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O wow awsome write on this.
this part i like the most.
She sleeps.. no need to question now
if she were wrong or right..
she knows in death.. His cause was just..
Her Lord and Savior's Sight..
well done |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:51:24 AM AEST
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This is a very touching write Billy...A truly lovely tribute, and I'm positive you make her smile every day...Well done.
Scorp. |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 11:17:47 AM AEST
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this just came off as genius
the words were perfect
the stanzas were all well placed
and the method to your storytelling was executed to perfection
perfect write
we can all learn from this |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by CarolinaBlue on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 05:37:01 PM AEST
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OMG! Billy this was breathtaking...the imagery beautiful, though the text was saddening there is a sense of calm near the end. You simply are devine. Bravo, my dear.
~Blue~ |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by waos on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:31:34 AM AEST
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That was a nice story, I love your flow and rhythm, it really reminds
me of style that just isn't in modern poetry as much. Keep it up, you
painted a beautiful, sad picture.
~Kara |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by brew on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 06:38:59 PM AEST
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Just awsome words written down......Yes it tells a story
Brew~ |
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 12:13:16 AM AEST
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Beautiful write.. M.O.H.
Do you know who Sir Edwin Arnold is.. American poet. You resemble his style.
Beautiful beginning.
Far up the lonely mountain side
my wandering footsteps led..
the moss lay thick beneath my feet,
the pines bent overhead.
Makes my bare feet feel.
RLPoetess ; ))
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Re: Mountain Dust
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 12:25:29 AM AEST
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OOPS. ARNOLD, SIR EDWIN (1832-1904) , British poet and jour; nalist, was born on the loth of June 1832, and was educated at the King's school, Rochester; King's College, London;
http://encyclopedia.jrank.org/APO_ARN/ARNOLD_SIR_EDWIN_1832_1904_.html
you still have his writing style.. a lot.. I love it.
RLPoetess ; )) |
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