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third eye set
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:46:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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wandering around with my feelings unkind
the city lights anuff to blind
these cold concrete walls trap us within
keeping us like sheep our shepard is sin
masked by thum of engines and the chatter of the screen
our vision so dark the footpath isnt seen
walking by soals to hungry to beg
there biggest crime is stepping over his leg
a junkie a crackhead arnt they human to
just hating there life we all do
remember those soals when you pass on by
in a few years they will probaly die
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2005-07-06 23:46:31]
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Re: third eye set
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:55:42 PM AEST
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I read it, I'm not warped. Sorry.
It is good work though, albeit with some spelling errors (Microsoft Word is a good thing). I like the thought behind it. Too few people notice the trap you speak of.
these cold concrete walls trap us within
keeping us like sheep our shepard is sin
Good lines, these. Keep it up.
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Re: third eye set
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:59:49 PM AEST
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I Love your format!
Do we live in the same town?LOL!!! This is true we do forget them, but whats more they forget thierselvs. I have a cousent who is headed thier, I was on the same path with her, but luckily lost my way.
Its sad thou you cant always help others to see where they are headed.
Beautiful write, it
makes ya think!!!
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