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help me open the door to my heart.
Contributed by
irememberyou
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Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 04:38:12 PM in AEST
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its you that makes my head spin
frantically looking for a place to hide
my heart, so you dont steal it right from
under my nose. dont think that ill just give
you the key to my heart, when i cant even
budge that door open for myself. dont
take pity on me while i sit here locked in
my mind, take the chance to help me open
this stubborn door, and realize that the
choices my heart makes and my mind makes
are two different things, make me realize that
i need to love, and to be loved in return.
Its what my heart aches for and my mind and body
is to afraid to go after. If you can just open the
door to my heart, you'll see a girl that was once
hurt before and a girl that dosent want to be hurt
again. Please dont hurt me and make my heart bleed black.
Let me love you with every ounce of heart i have left.
Before its to late to love, and you wont be there anymore.
XoOxOxoXoOxOxoXoOxOxoXoOxOxoXoOxOxoXoOxOxo
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by PinkPoet on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 04:49:34 PM AEST
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| good thoughts, i would say make it more poetic and less like a letter. do you know what i mean? Small tweeking and it would be more of a flow....good job=) |
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by jjones12 on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:13:51 PM AEST
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great write.
=Jen= |
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by jjones12 on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:13:54 PM AEST
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great write.
=Jen= |
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by Sirena_Degana on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:28:41 PM AEST
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so realistic and pretty
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 09:04:12 PM AEST
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Beautiful.
I can relate very much to your thoughts of not wanting to be hurt again, I really again.
Very well written and honest.
I hope you find the one that opens that door. |
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 02:10:40 AM AEST
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well thought out and writin
just to much flooding on
the same lines break it down
a lil.bit always try to start a new
sentence on each line it makes
so much easier to read
and remember its better to have
loved and lost then to never have
loved at all
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 04:18:46 AM AEST
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The poem is adorable. But may i suggest having some breaks so that the poem won't be as long as it looks.
Jane xxx |
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Re: help me open the door to my heart.
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by Sahara on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 05:06:37 AM AEST
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I loved it :)
Summed up alot of what I've been feeling as of late.
Sonya
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