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''Fallen''
Contributed by
DAVIS
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Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 12:52:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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"FALLEN"
Reaching heights, spoken of in lore...
Visions of heaven, I haven't seen before...
The ascension is rapid, to levels unknown...
Falling just short, of seeing God's throne...
Living in a moment, within a moment...
Past failures justified, a welcome atonement...
Flight by my own sheer will, a sensation new to me...
The eternal war ceases, weight has overcome gravity...
Scorching the heavens, with a trail of flame...
My senses revived, never more will I be the same...
The the hand I held, slips through my grasp...
Pain becomes my company, like venom from an asp...
A heaviness, fills my every pore...
I see things, I saw once before...
The descent, racing at speeds untold...
Imaginary wings, begin to fold...
On impact, is born an epic explosion...
The remains are subject, to timeless erosion...
What rises from the ashes, God is callin'...
The transformation has begun, for I have fallen...
Copyright ©
DAVIS
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2005-07-06 12:52:34]
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 12:56:11 PM AEST
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very lovely write so rich with emotion and it flows nicely
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 02:06:01 PM AEST
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Nice poem i liked it...
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by Dri on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 02:45:01 PM AEST
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| the meter feels a bit stretched in a few places, but other than that, very good. |
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by Justintears on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 07:39:47 PM AEST
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| well written and highly emotional. nice- |
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 04:23:02 AM AEST
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I really am sorry you have to go through all this. But that makes us into a better person. So keep your chin up.
Love the poem by the way. Keep them comming.
Jane xxx |
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by Dorkfish on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 12:23:01 PM AEST
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| Great job. I love the emotion and expression. You really care for this person and it shows. Welcome to YPDC! |
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Re: ''Fallen''
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by vibes2go on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 05:54:29 PM AEST
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I agree with all of the above.
mary |
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