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Broken Glass
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 07:44:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Stared at my reflection
To get to the other side
But there's nothing there I can't get here
It's just a way to hide
When hiding's what you hate to do
It comes too naturally
And what you find will not be real
But fake blinds, actually
It's much too late for my repair
Too hard to start anew
I want to break this looking glass
And find a different view
But I can't do it by myself
Not with my own two hands
It wears on me so tight it might
Snap like a rubber band
I just don't want to have to bleed
When all is said and done
Cuz breaking that old looking glass
Is better than to run
It took a while to turn away
But now I really see
And every day lets me see how
I've lost all sight of me
They all say life's a rocky road
With obstacles to pass
So in my rear-view mirror
Let there be some broken glass
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Re: Broken Glass
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by springchic1979 on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 08:04:00 AM AEST
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Excellent. In my opinion I believe it would turn out to make a great song.
I can really relate to your verse:
"I want to break this looking glass
And find a different view"
I have been there and felt that same urge.
A wonderful write indeed.
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Re: Broken Glass
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 09:07:50 AM AEST
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Ohh Chels thats one heck of a poem/lyrics. I like the way it all flowed together. It's good to see you post again, hope to see more of it soon?
Jane xxx |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 12:26:25 PM AEST
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I agree could be a song.
Amazing write really enjoyed think we all go through this stage as some point.
Wonderful
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Dri on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 02:49:27 PM AEST
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very well written.
and every day lets me see how
i've lost all sight of me
i know how that is... |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 04:23:33 PM AEST
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An excellent, very well written piece of poetry/song. Expressed so deep and so well. I loved the flow and I can so much relate with ur poem alot. An awesome write. Well done.
Hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 08:57:10 AM AEST
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| incredible write, well done |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by boobiepeach on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:22:31 AM AEST
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i loved this yes very good. would make a great song!
"So in my rear-view mirror
Let there be some broken glass"
awsome
peach |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Dorkfish on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:59:48 AM AEST
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| Good job. That was very good. Yes it could be a great song. |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 10:34:12 PM AEST
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| well chelsea i believe this is one of the first poems ive read from you ever. i was impressed with bits of this mainly because of the rhythm, analogies, or the bit of creativity sprinkled throughout this. i would say some other things i liked was the beginning, for its concept and the ending, was just perfect. i would say this was a bit of self awareness added as well (which personal writes sometimes do turn out to be the better ones from a poet). i would say the one thing i found off was the use of, "cuz". with a poem as professional as this having, cuz in it just kind of was a let down for me. 'Cause is fine for rhythm, but...i just really hate those short cuts in writing words, no offense =] ::forgot to look for any stupid, great write comments on this:: |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 01:28:31 AM AEST
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Well said. Well said.
Take care, and remember, duct tape fixes everything, almost. Peace.
David |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 10:57:41 AM AEST
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| Wow! this poem reminds me of one of my friend's poem "Reflecting Pool" also very good...his name is Grey_Matters, check it out i think you'll like it and it has a pretty similar concept. Very good poem! |
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Re: Broken Glass
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by GurLG0nEWr0ng on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 12:10:04 AM AEST
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Just Lovely!
-k |
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