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Bleeding Emotionlessly
Contributed by
iluvpencils
on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:04:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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My heart is on fire
The flames dance around my chest
Licking at my skin
Seared flesh glows red
But fades to gray
I watch so stoicly
As my soul decays
I could end this so easily
But I won't
I won't
I won't press down on the bandages
I won't pretend these scars aren't noticeable
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Re: Bleeding Emotionlessly
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 01:36:16 PM AEST
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a really good poem
very effective
megs
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Re: Bleeding Emotionlessly
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:21:13 PM AEST
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Very nice write.. nice contact with self..
I like the word usage here.. nice ideas for explanations of a wounded heart..
but as you know, ending it won't end the situation.. dealing with it will.. pain.. hurt, pain.. but nevertheless.. dealing with it is the best way out ..
I can just see the red hot flames on the chest.. what that heart is doing..
I won't pretend these scars aren't noticeable
I like the ending.. not pretending.. being mature and saying... hey.. I am real.. at least that is how I took it..
very brilliant write.
Raquel Leah
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Re: Bleeding Emotionlessly
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:27:24 PM AEST
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Oopse, forgot to say.. I really like the title..
Bleeding (Emotionlessly).. heart is dying.. or deadlike.. just hot flaming dead..
or perhaps, the heat will aid it along..
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Re: Bleeding Emotionlessly
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by Live2Die on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 09:37:24 PM AEST
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Oh, wow. I don't know what to say. Amazing comes to mind, and I cant really think of anything else. It really hits home, and is easy to relate to. Very, extremely good one.
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