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In Death Is Life
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:22:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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In Death Is Life
Sour and distasteful, Unknown and wasteful
Driven by the undertow of life, stretched by each and every strife
Boring and bland, Discontent and mad
Hues too deep to care for, darkness shadowed by dispair and gore
Shallow and bleak, Putrid and weak
Saddened by each thought of mind, corrosion seemingly the real deny
Crestfallen and broken, Desperate and open
Screams masked by pounding hearts, now in death, life has a start
. . .
Life: Filled full of chaotic depression and madness
Death: Release of all worries and numbing sadness
Death is the greatest stretch of happiness
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:35:42 PM AEST
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| i cant really what is different about this, except the style. your ending very well done. reminds me of the set up of three days grace with just like you. you have some creative rhymes, but also some very old ones, so i suppose you mixed them well enough. |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:39:59 PM AEST
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Nice job Clark...I sit here enjoying yet another of your darkly descriptive writes! You found the perfect home for that title too : )
Scorp. |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Zeldianus on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 09:02:29 PM AEST
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| darkly ironic. amazing write, just cant think of anything else to say...keep up the good work! |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 11:37:47 PM AEST
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Wow. This is a very well written piece. I like the positive out look on death. Very good.
~D.S. Hammoulton
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by boobiepeach on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:24:06 AM AEST
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wow. moving write. so dark and so sad.
but good
peach |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:10:18 PM AEST
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What can I say? Another fine piece of poetry to add to ur other great work. You always write with sheer style. 5 big stars for u Clark.
Hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 08:24:07 PM AEST
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Oh i do agree with these dark words clark.
"Life: Filled full of chaotic depression and madness
Death: Release of all worries and numbing sadness".....Amazing line, hit the heart.
I can relate to this one clark, very raw. |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:21:46 PM AEST
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You are the man
I love this poem today ,yesterday and
forever want to give a ten but 5 is all they allow. |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:49:59 PM AEST
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Interesting style and format. It flows aye well. As to whether death is the greatest stretch of happiness, I'm none too sure, but it does have a ring to it. Perhaps it is, but I'll not stretch happiness quite that far. Heh... If I can't obtain it, I'll stop stretching and settle with duty. Keep it up.
Andrew |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 03:02:07 AM AEST
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Told you i was gonna comment twice
on this lol
The forth stanza I like it alot
It very simply put but very
complex
I Love when I have to seat and say huh
its like its saying to find the meaning
of life you must suffer first hope I got
that right P-mail and let me know |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 10:19:07 AM AEST
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Phenominal as usual Mr. Clark (lol)
I really enjoyed this because it got me thinking, which is always good. Every line makes you wonder, this is the kind of piece that you could read over and over and get something new everytime, the kind of piece that gets others brainstorming up new writes... it was very VERY well written I was very impressed... keep up the great writes.
.amanda. |
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Re: In Death Is Life
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 02:06:42 PM AEST
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beautifully esoteric, lovely in its dark light,
hugs n' love nessa |
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