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Your Beauty Unseen
Contributed by
wizard
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Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 07:40:31 PM in AEST
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Your beauty unseen this long weekend past;
Today- finally - reunited at last,
A three day eternity bestowed upon me,
Now your beauty again is all that I see.
Beside me you weren't - though I felt you inside,
Many miles between us - though you still couldn't hide,
I kissed you goodnight though you weren't in my bed...
Never a moment that you're not in my head.
And each night at slumber you danced in my dreams,
'Round daisies and roses and by golden streams.
As I woke to the sunrise I knew it was you,
shining your smile like only you do.
And the birds singing gently were calling your name
to remind me that soon it would again be the same,
as it was 'fore I left, with you in my arms,
With your lips against mine - so happy and calm.
Copyright ©
wizard
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2005-07-05 19:40:31]
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 07:45:55 PM AEST
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Awww this is nice Wiz! What a sweet write, with a good flow and loving thoughts...
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 07:48:52 PM AEST
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daisies and roses and by golden streams so lovely this entire poem is one that makes me melt beautiful indeed
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 07:52:41 PM AEST
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WOW bro..
what an awesome write!
the imagery and visuals are absolutely outstanding..
"And each night at slumber you danced in my dreams
‘Round daisies and roses and by golden streams,
As I woke to the sunrise I knew it was you
shining your smile like only you do"
The last stanza also blew me away!
Very, very well written..
I know you've heard it before but..
This is your best yet..
It only goes to show that you DO get better with every write!
Amazing bro..
Billy
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by jyssvw22 on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 07:56:33 PM AEST
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this was a very nice write
good job |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:08:35 PM AEST
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Wow...Amazing!! I felt as tho I had written this...
"Beside me you weren’t – though I felt you inside,
Many miles between us – though you still couldn’t hide,
I kissed you goodnight though you weren’t in my bed...
Never a moment that you’re not in my head"
I can so identify!!
Jenni
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by brew on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 09:00:18 PM AEST
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Hmmmmmmmmm..................To the one who has or will that heart..........WOW! What a write, hope they are the "special" to you. Im just rather speeecheless....
Brew~ |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 09:21:41 PM AEST
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Aww Paul, how sweet. I hope your special someone appreciates your love and the words you pen for her. May she be with you again soon.
Rita |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 12:30:40 AM AEST
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Paul this is absolutely remarkable. With each and every write u seem to get better. You're a talented writer whose work speaks for itself. Outstanding and so captivating. I've become one of ur fans now,lol. Keep it up
Hugs,
Dreamer
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by boobiepeach on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:47:12 AM AEST
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what a heart warming poem.
sweet and good with good intension.
i miss those days myself.
good for you..
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Dorkfish on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:55:15 AM AEST
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| Very sweet. I really enjoyed that. Nice wording. That was a great piece. |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:18:37 AM AEST
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Beautiful as though the poem wrote itself
which means your hand was being guided
by your heart, a lovely peice of writting in deed
Ben |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by gwenevere on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 04:11:17 PM AEST
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| Beautiful write of love,Ros |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 01:43:43 AM AEST
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Wow I am blown a way
I'm actually speechless
and that has never happed
to me from reading a poem
5 plus |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:43:15 AM AEST
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| awwww very sweet and beatuiful write. |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Kitty06 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 10:48:42 PM AEST
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| Once again you have written a wonderful poem. Though this one is more beautiful and uplifting than others of yours I've read. I love the first two lines in the last stanza. It captures the yearning of waiting love. An absolutely gorgeous poem. |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 08:07:58 PM AEST
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| What's with the weird symbols...they're pretty kool. |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 07:58:35 PM AEST
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Such a tremendously beautiful write. What a sweet, romantic soul
you possess. It is quite endearing. This flows so well and the
words . . . oh god! the words are brilliant ! I know what it is like
to have someone dance in your dreams . . . yes, truly stunning!
ardently, deftly, and oh! so lovingly written.
*sighing in wonderment*
~Breezy |
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Re: Your Beauty Unseen
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 2nd May 2006 @ 12:37:08 PM AEST
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This is beautiful. Love is a very beautiful thing, and you portray it well.
Take care.
David |
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