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Twilight Parfait
Contributed by
Man_On_High
on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 10:20:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The evening died in a twilight pastel parfait..
as delicious in demise,
as it's delicate key lime dawn.
Cranberry relish over streaks of marmalade..
Thick gooey sweetness of all my joy....
Popsicle blue beneath a mulberry syrup,
stretching out to the sugar spackled.. sea dawn sky!!
The perfection of THIS DAY!!
As the surf crashed like liquid cotton.. crystal crushed lemon slush-
It makes my heart smile through the soles of my feet..!
Kissed by the sun,
I drug my way through the (((scalloped }
ridges.. a warming wash of ivory sand.
Strolling at sunset,
I stopped in reverence..
an inner snapshot.. "sniiick-clishhh"
quiet awe..
The twilight furnace and its fierce scalding power
slipping away..
as if it were spitting resistance..
a furious child pulled into the.. stern soothing arms
of the sea.
I am so full...
A'burst with satisfaction!!
Solar kissed, a burnished copper ..
afloat in the colors of your heart and mine~
And to think,
parfait for desert!
A cheeky dry wine..
drizzled on the fruits
of daydream labors;
now far and away gone,
bore in the scoop of my hungry spoon.
No real translation~
No fancy words..
only love..
life..
and you .
The secret chatter and whisperd tumble of the sea..
a'drizzle on my mind;
my thoughts, a smeared cream berry blue
preserved in private infamy..
locked in the smile of my eyes.
M.O.H..
Copyright ©
Man_On_High
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2005-07-03 22:20:44]
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 10:29:14 PM AEST
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Geez...this was so delicious, it made me hungry!!
Lovely write..
Jenni |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 10:47:06 PM AEST
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Great job!!! Breathtaking (and yummy!!) words and imagery...Love the metaphors you used as well. The style and format were perfect for this piece, and the beginning instantly drew me in...Very well done!!
Scorp.
(Who is now heading to a cafe for dessert!!) |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by allforyou on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 10:51:12 PM AEST
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effing amazing! perfection or close too it!...please don't stop
--Kar |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 11:10:45 PM AEST
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| quite different than most of your poems. i cant say i really liked this, because it didnt have any tragedy in it ::smiles:: this was very creative though, and that kept my attention. a lot of your verses i liked, but there are too many to copy and paste here, so i would say that if this had tragedy in it, i think i would like this much better =] |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by CarolinaBlue on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 11:32:58 PM AEST
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ok besides the fact that you made me forget my password to log in after reading this :-) I have never in all my life been seduced in this manner(with words I mean) by a day at the beach or an ocean sunset...very sensual descriptions and just the way I like it, sticky sweet! Oooops, did I say that???? well...you know what I mean. Two thumbs wayyyyy up, my friend. Glad you had a good day.
~Blue~ |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 12:44:23 AM AEST
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- oh AMAZING!!-
your word imagery is wonderful and your words are so yummy and descriptive!!!
a very soothing write that takes you to a happy place.
Excellent fellow poet. |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by wizard on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 01:10:09 AM AEST
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an abstract poem for you no doubt...but your perfection shines through in every line.
great job!
wizard |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by gwenevere on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 01:54:29 AM AEST
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| Oh, dear I'm hungry now.Different and interesting.I liked this a lot,Ros |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by emystar on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 05:43:39 AM AEST
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Intoxicating.
big smiles,
emy |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by jyssvw22 on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 10:25:05 AM AEST
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moh, you cease to amaze
food is sensual, we all know this, the way you tied it in, the way you involved it in somethign bigger then itself was just grand
nice as always
thanks
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 01:06:06 PM AEST
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Great write bill a poetic mural enjoyed reading it . . .
Ben |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 06:40:15 PM AEST
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It's truly incredible how u can change ur writing style, yet ucan do it with such brillance. Ur work is always so captivating and intriguing. The talented Mr B always leaves me hanging for more. 5 big stars from me.
Hugs,
Dreamer, who always enjoys reading Billy's fascinating work :-) |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 09:43:39 PM AEST
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there is some really excellent writing here... but all i can really say is: *yumm!!* hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:-
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by sweetangeluk on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 03:29:23 PM AEST
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Oh now i am ravenous. Just got to have an ice cream lolly you have tempted me to some cream lol
Fabulous
Love Angelxxxxx |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by nanb294eva on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:16:40 PM AEST
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No real translation~
No fancy words..NANCY
only love..
life..
and you .
BILLY,
ONLY LOVE...
LIFE..
AND YOU
IS WHAT I ,
LOOK FORWARD TO !!!!!!!
THE EXTRA SPECIAL TIME ON THE BEACHES
ARE ALWAYS LOCKED IN THE SMILES OF YOUR EYES,
WHEN I SEE THEM IN THE MOONLIGHT AND THEN THE SUNLIGHT,
I PRESERVE THE MEMORY FOR THE NEXT TIME WE SPEND ALONE ON THE BEACH
GAZING AT THE STARS AND THEN THE SUN
This poem put me back there,
and that was just an appetizer,
for the full course meal (our life) to come,
I love you and love when you write poems of all kinds but these ones are extra special Thanks
LOVE ALWAYS NANCE
XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by nanb294eva on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:18:05 PM AEST
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No real translation~
No fancy words..NANCY
only love..
life..
and you .
BILLY,
ONLY LOVE...
LIFE..
AND YOU
IS WHAT I ,
LOOK FORWARD TO !!!!!!!
THE EXTRA SPECIAL TIME ON THE BEACHES
ARE ALWAYS LOCKED IN THE SMILES OF YOUR EYES,
WHEN I SEE THEM IN THE MOONLIGHT AND THEN THE SUNLIGHT,
I PRESERVE THE MEMORY FOR THE NEXT TIME WE SPEND ALONE ON THE BEACH
GAZING AT THE STARS AND THEN THE SUN
This poem put me back there,
and that was just an appetizer,
for the full course meal (our life) to come,
I love you and love when you write poems of all kinds but these ones are extra special Thanks
LOVE ALWAYS NANCE
XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by brew on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 08:36:41 AM AEST
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Intense, yet soft............made you think of what alot of those words could be. Imagiary.....WOW! Always a pleasure to read your writes.
Brew~ |
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Re: Twilight Parfait
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 06:59:41 AM AEST
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I think everyone thats gonna read this has read it already So I'm just gonna say it
if i was a chick my pantys be wet right now lol |
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