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Deeper Meanings
Contributed by
solomon
on
Friday, 12th September 2008 @ 11:25:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
Family
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Fall:
Vibrant dying leaves
How glorious is your death
Slowly do depart
Mountain Air:
Cold, clean mountain air
Breathed deeply within my soul
View Heaven with me
Growing Season:
Flowing water bathe
Seeds beneath the ground growing
Give abundant life
The Beach:
Shores of salty sand
Abused by white crested waves
Safety at low tide
Earthquake:
Trembling the Earth shakes
Clashing with its inner self
Until peace is gained
Shooting Star:
Streak across the sky
Joy your fiery tail brings
Hopeful wishes too
A Breeze:
Gently touching me
Your presence brings me pleasure
Surround me always
Clouds:
White and soft you seem
Yet fierce is your dark temper
Joy when you are gone
A Turtle:
Nature’s armored tank
A slow and steady creature
Oh to have your shell
Copyright ©
solomon
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2008-09-12 23:25:29]
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Re: Re: Deeper Meanings
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Friday, 3rd April 2009 @ 03:43:14 PM AEST
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| wow i really liked it! |
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Re: Re: Deeper Meanings
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Monday, 6th April 2009 @ 07:43:09 PM AEST
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| a well penned poem flowing with wonderful mataphors, simile, and action verbs that describe nature in it's wonder well done |
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Re: Re: Deeper Meanings
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Wednesday, 10th June 2009 @ 12:50:01 PM AEST
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| sounds good good rythm but .it has no good transintios try to pass the meaning of the whole poem through the whole the to keep the reader in the mind set of the poem your main objective as a writers is to give your art life.i read this i see a poem i dont see life try to give each part a maine idea that guides the reader through the poem |
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Re: Re: Deeper Meanings
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Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 05:41:06 PM AEST
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| it was a pleasant re-experience of nature in my mind with your words. very nice. |
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Re: Re: Deeper Meanings
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Saturday, 8th March 2014 @ 09:35:11 AM AEST
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| totally far out and cool! I really like it! |
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Re: Re: Deeper Meanings
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Saturday, 14th February 2015 @ 02:52:24 PM AEST
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| This poem is nature filled. Enjoyed it. |
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